thump and thud
become good words for my heart
swollen, too
the warm pulsating thick against my ribs
a glup and glut
your words increase
its insistent speech,
a wallop-wish
I have understood before
the physicalemotional pain of love,
the tug,
but never before felt
this blooded organ
so conscious,
so full.

October ’07


33 Responses to “onomatopoeia”

  1. 1 philosophy of life October 7, 2007 at 12:22 pm

    Imaginative urgency of the vital organ – that guides us through our lives.

    Well Done – so loved reading.

    ps Please feel free to view my blog and comment – if you so wish.

  2. 2 pizazz October 8, 2007 at 9:37 pm

    thanks much πŸ™‚

    I have viewed your blog briefly and will do so in more length and with comments after exams πŸ™‚

  3. 3 philosophyoflife October 9, 2007 at 5:35 pm

    Thanks – and Good Luck with your exams….

  4. 4 pizazz October 10, 2007 at 1:15 am

    Thankyou πŸ™‚

  5. 5 anaghaa October 12, 2007 at 3:59 pm

    really beautiful…….

  6. 6 mo79uk October 12, 2007 at 6:58 pm

    Onomatopoeia…reminds me of GCSE English back in ’95 when I was 15.

    Good poem, very effective.

  7. 7 pizazz October 14, 2007 at 12:17 am

    Thankyou very much!

  8. 8 bgraef October 17, 2007 at 5:21 am

    Thats better than that empty feeling I sometimes get in my chest.

  9. 9 Vladimir October 21, 2007 at 4:14 pm

    😦 I’m so sad because I can’t get the point of the song. My English sucks and this sounds like good song, but only sounds, if I was able to pronounce all words right πŸ˜›

  10. 10 pizazz October 21, 2007 at 8:33 pm

    It’s a poem, not a song πŸ™‚ haha… I’m sure *creative* pronunciation would work just as well, you don’t need to stick to the rules of language πŸ˜›

  11. 11 Vladimir October 22, 2007 at 10:56 pm

    :-$ Well, in my language song and poem means same, I mean ‘pesma’ in Serbian is same for poem and for some song :-D, but ‘poezija’ is explaining poem… Poezija means poetry πŸ˜›

    Sorry because my mistake…

  12. 13 pizazz October 23, 2007 at 12:23 am

    That’s okay Vladimir πŸ™‚ it’s interesting to learn about other languages.

    And thankyou, kindnotes.

  13. 14 Rubel October 23, 2007 at 5:07 am

    Beautiful Kobita( Poem).
    I am really impressed reading your post and blog arrangement. I am going to add you in my blogrole.

    I am a web developer so my posts are techinical although i will be happy if you see my blog an comments there.
    I am apolosize my english is not good. 😦

  14. 15 pizazz October 23, 2007 at 8:29 am

    Thankyou Rubel πŸ™‚

  15. 16 naxeem October 26, 2007 at 1:27 pm

    thats a good poem… you must be good at writing poems…

  16. 17 Rajeev Rajan October 30, 2007 at 3:14 pm

    Good poem.. great smile.. keep it up.. keep smiling.. πŸ™‚

  17. 18 philosophyoflife October 30, 2007 at 4:44 pm

    Just popped over to see if any new poetry has been placed – eager to view πŸ™‚

  18. 19 pizazz October 31, 2007 at 1:39 am

    Thankyou naxeem… and Philos, I haven’t had time to write any poetry lately, but exams will be over soon and I should be writing again πŸ™‚

  19. 20 pizazz October 31, 2007 at 1:42 am

    And thankyou Rajeev!

  20. 21 minispiel October 31, 2007 at 5:13 am

    I don’t know if you’re tired of hearing this, but I really like this poem. It truly makes the heart alive.

  21. 22 pizazz November 1, 2007 at 1:50 am

    Tire of compliments on my poetry? As if! πŸ˜›

    Thankyou very much minispiel, I’m so glad you enjoyed it.

  22. 23 sunny2242 November 1, 2007 at 7:24 pm

    hey I really loved this poem and sent it to my girl as mine…..hope you don’t mind .(sorry πŸ™‚ )

  23. 24 pizazz November 1, 2007 at 9:51 pm

    Um, actually yes I do mind… not hugely, buuut…. taking someone else’s work and claiming it as your own is called plagiarism. In the future why not say “I found this really nice poem and it describes how I feel about you.” Don’t claim you wrote poetry you didn’t – aside from the whole plagiarism thing, in a relationship context that is being pretty much a big way of losing many many Smooth points if she finds out it wasn’t you who wrote it (and a quick Google search would be all it took.) Just don’t do it – this is more relationship advice than an angry original artist πŸ˜›

  24. 26 gnanavel November 3, 2007 at 8:36 am

    hi dear friend

  25. 27 sutcivni November 4, 2007 at 1:35 pm

    nice. makes me remember my teacher back in grade school who gave me one of the best poem/prose i know. the invitation by oriah. πŸ™‚

  26. 28 mister mindlove November 4, 2007 at 2:05 pm

    I loved the imagery and the word usage. Really good!

  27. 29 pizazz November 4, 2007 at 10:37 pm

    thanks all πŸ™‚

  28. 30 zephyrsex November 5, 2007 at 2:41 am

    this is depicted very well.
    I love the mental image you create.
    It’s like magic.

  29. 31 theperfectpair November 6, 2007 at 2:59 am

    I really do like that. I like that it is different in words but everyone can relate to it in some way shape or form. I like that it is simple but very strong in it’s way of delivery. also try not to plagiarize… lol

  30. 32 katie0me November 14, 2007 at 10:39 pm

    i loved that. ur a awesome writer.

  31. 33 misstrouble December 27, 2007 at 3:54 am

    this is beautiful.

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