In a pulse

In a pulse
In the way
my heart quickens
in a pang,
in a desperate left-turn sidestep
whirling girligan
hula crazy
absence
what are you finding?
Behind your couch,
in candles blown out

I am finding pieces of you
wrapped up in old socks
held together
with mangy hair-ties,
in between a particle of dust
and a dead fly’s abandoned leg
you are there
or more, what you were
and what you passed to me –
with a sense of martyrdom & legacy
– is becoming slowly my self-awareness,
my left-turn right-march
falling on the floor
jump up dedication,
my strive
and drive

and yes,
In a pulse
In the way my heart quickens
I hear what you taught me
and can no longer uphold,
urging
me onwards
and up.

November ’07

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85 Responses to “In a pulse”


  1. 1 Kevin Olsen November 6, 2007 at 11:19 pm

    Very powerful. I can relate, and though that’s not the goal of all poetry, I can say this is very universal and appealing. Well done!

    http://kevinolsenpoet.wordpress.com/poetry/

  2. 2 pizazz November 7, 2007 at 11:12 pm

    Thankyou very much πŸ™‚

  3. 3 belayet November 9, 2007 at 6:26 am

    good post

  4. 4 samii28 November 9, 2007 at 7:23 pm

    good verses and apoet

  5. 5 whitenacho November 10, 2007 at 1:01 am

    Yes love can be found anywhere and everywhere. Good cadence.

  6. 7 gkofikyei November 10, 2007 at 11:01 pm

    I love it,very touching.Keep it up

  7. 8 pizazz November 11, 2007 at 12:13 am

    thankyou all very much. I’m so glad that my poetry is being read and enjoyed.

  8. 9 sk8grly123 November 11, 2007 at 5:21 am

    amazing

  9. 12 erazuz November 12, 2007 at 9:23 pm

    Lady is a good poem.

  10. 13 erazuz November 12, 2007 at 9:24 pm

    Lady is a good poem.

    angelerazo.elsalvador.com

  11. 14 treehugg3rxd November 13, 2007 at 4:27 pm

    that happens to be a very good poem. :]

    <33

  12. 15 ano November 13, 2007 at 7:06 pm

    nice one….liked it….!!
    n keep smiling πŸ™‚

  13. 17 marianemanuel November 14, 2007 at 3:18 pm

    Very well done! Congratulations!
    marianemanuel.com

  14. 18 Eleanor Dickinson November 15, 2007 at 9:33 am

    I find the concluding segment unresolved and weaker in word choice than the earlier sections. It’s too good a piece to leave unfinished.

  15. 19 mandy November 16, 2007 at 8:45 am

    Amazing, reading this in early morning Amsterdam.

    mandy

  16. 20 gingertabby November 17, 2007 at 5:16 pm

    Amazing =]

    This post has a reason
    Unlike any of mine =]

    Congrats

  17. 21 ali November 17, 2007 at 10:37 pm

    tank you very much

  18. 22 ankita November 18, 2007 at 3:53 pm

    you know onething,for me when am overfilled with emotions…

    words,my words which i pen down are da best outlook…

    when i read your post…i found a glimpse of me….here in you

    so good job done….

  19. 24 bradox November 19, 2007 at 2:08 am

    very nice … !

  20. 25 1795a November 19, 2007 at 2:08 am

    very sweel i love it its a nice peom thingy you have there my email is anniesefart@wordpress.com

  21. 26 paulina. November 19, 2007 at 2:19 am

    this touched me deeply.

    thanx.!

  22. 27 alfigenk November 20, 2007 at 6:54 am

    nice…bring me to sea of dreams…
    i like it….

  23. 28 lolalolo November 20, 2007 at 9:07 am

    nice!

    check out my blog:
    http//lolalolo.wordpress.com

  24. 29 thecandles November 21, 2007 at 11:24 am

    hhmm ….very good

  25. 31 pizazz November 23, 2007 at 12:07 am

    Thankyou everyone… I’m so glad my poetry is being enjoyed so much.

    Especially big thanks to Eleanor Dickinson. Constructive critique comes few and far between and I really appreciate it. I also agree with you – the last stanza is weak. I’ll have another go at it sometime soon.

  26. 32 dirus November 23, 2007 at 6:40 am

    It’S a really good poem,but i think it was a little negative outlook on life.

  27. 33 Christopher Leibow November 24, 2007 at 10:54 pm

    Great imagery. I love the detail of the fly’s leg. beautiful.

  28. 35 barrycade November 27, 2007 at 10:39 am

    nice post. enjoyed reading it here in Manila, on a rainy Tuesday night.

  29. 37 adelina November 28, 2007 at 11:38 am

    Super nice… I like it & I love it.

  30. 38 sabature November 29, 2007 at 4:31 am

    beautiful pizazz I really enjoyed reading it…

  31. 39 pizazz December 1, 2007 at 11:12 am

    Thanks πŸ™‚

  32. 40 pizazz December 1, 2007 at 11:13 am

    And Dirus – everyone has positive and negative moments in life and you write how you feel at the time πŸ™‚

    This particular one is not negative. It is about negative things having positive results.

  33. 41 Lady Jaye December 3, 2007 at 2:28 am

    Your last comment really intrigues me. About how negative things have positive results. That’s exactly what I got out what you wrote and it really touched me because of the way that things are going in my personal life. Thank you for expressing what I cannot say.

  34. 42 trish December 3, 2007 at 3:00 am

    sensational writing. i’m a pizazz convert.

  35. 43 Bec December 3, 2007 at 7:07 am

    thankyou both.

  36. 44 thecandles December 4, 2007 at 5:39 am

    Seriously!
    A very nice way of presentation
    which is a new inspiration
    for this young generation
    to write, read and comprehension.
    Though I am not a good poet but want to say ‘CONGRATULATION’.

    ‘MAY GOD BLESS YOU’ to write some valuable poems also…

  37. 45 Bec December 5, 2007 at 9:35 am

    Haha, thankyou!

  38. 46 ktrain December 9, 2007 at 12:24 am

    November rian speaks loudly through dropping thoughts. Feelings freeze in the decemberance of rain. Frozen feelings melt amongst hope

  39. 47 merlin08 December 11, 2007 at 9:11 pm

    so amazing and straight from the heart… you’re a great poet… yes you are.

    -Jemm

    http://thebluequill.wordpress.com

  40. 48 Lady December 11, 2007 at 11:59 pm

    Love the imagery. . . πŸ™‚

  41. 49 hermipowell December 12, 2007 at 1:27 am

    Wow! I loved it. Can I quote you? I don’t think the last stanza was weak at all. It’s perfect! Now come and see how it looks on my blog, fullness.wordpress.com. My life experience is right there with this poem it brought something pure forward. Thank you.

  42. 50 Bec December 12, 2007 at 6:59 am

    Thankyou so much to everyone for your kind comments. It’s very encouraging when other people enjoy my writing this much. Thankyou.

  43. 51 Hamid Ali December 14, 2007 at 10:48 am

    very strong feeling i like it very much i want some more about it

  44. 52 vitalija December 15, 2007 at 12:30 am

    Verry lovely and cute ;]]

  45. 53 vitalija December 15, 2007 at 12:31 am

    Whats p ;>>

  46. 54 x3140 December 15, 2007 at 4:06 am

    First time read your poetry and impressed lot.
    Thank you for sharing thought provoking intresting poetry.

    x3140

  47. 55 madhubalan December 17, 2007 at 7:43 am

    very nice thinking, excellent. keep writing. i would like to see many like these

  48. 57 Bec December 19, 2007 at 6:36 am

    thanks everyone. more is coming.

  49. 58 fivereflections December 21, 2007 at 10:04 pm

    delightfully charming

  50. 59 Rose December 23, 2007 at 2:34 am

    thankyou for such a bad poem! it touched me in the scencs of my bum tingling and wanting to crap all over the computer screen! IT WAS SO SHIT! thankyou!

  51. 60 Bec December 23, 2007 at 3:11 am

    Thankyou fivereflections. As for you Rose, criticism is much more useful when it is constructive. As it is, you just made yourself look unimaginative and dim-witted.

  52. 61 spacegirljournal December 23, 2007 at 6:07 pm

    Wow!! I loved it. Great poem hon.

  53. 62 hrtbrkkid December 27, 2007 at 1:08 am

    hi i loved your own poem n i like your eyes. πŸ™‚

  54. 63 hrtbrkkid December 27, 2007 at 1:10 am

    i’m new hear plz look my post also πŸ˜‰

  55. 64 amberb4 December 28, 2007 at 5:18 am

    Sounds like Rose is wilted and dryed up from lack of love. The poem is original and sounds honest when read aloud.

  56. 65 abaasi December 28, 2007 at 2:26 pm

    it makes smile wherever i remember my girl lover

  57. 66 yogash December 29, 2007 at 4:38 am

    I have enjoyed seeing this poem transform into the maturity that you have found. Maybe I, myself have transformed since I first read it a month or so ago. Thank you for sharing!

  58. 67 workshopgalz December 29, 2007 at 10:14 am

    nice…

  59. 69 Nazio December 31, 2007 at 2:37 pm

    Good Day. In A Pulse – you Know Who am Nazio, send yourself and wish you for you is all that you and neighbor, that the days is serene and that you can dedicate to what is you more to heart. In all omens with serenity and happiness. Good Christmas and Good Year, OMENS. Welcome Nazio in Italy

  60. 70 nazzs December 31, 2007 at 7:27 pm

    good poem and touching especially under this lines

    In the way my heart quickens
    I hear what you taught me
    and can no longer uphold,

  61. 71 twilightwatcher January 3, 2008 at 2:37 am

    Beautiful. I love the fact that it can be related to real life.

    Rock on girl!

  62. 72 yen January 6, 2008 at 10:59 am

    wow. i love this!

  63. 73 togetheralone January 6, 2008 at 3:45 pm

    I have found this randomley, but am so glad I did. A really terse and lean structure and some wonderful reflections on the big ‘l’ word, ta and keep writing! πŸ™‚

  64. 74 erinjeanine January 6, 2008 at 9:15 pm

    thank you for this. i’ve been looking for something, anything to tell me it’s okay to still feel him around even though he’s gone, and there you were with you’re comforting words.

    it’s beautiful.

  65. 75 music January 7, 2008 at 1:58 am

    very interesting.
    i’m adding in RSS Reader

  66. 76 kcufniarb January 10, 2008 at 5:40 pm

    Love fails. End of story. God poem tho.

  67. 77 jijichan January 10, 2008 at 9:05 pm

    very nice πŸ™‚

  68. 78 Bec January 13, 2008 at 10:33 pm

    thanks for all the comments!

    amber-I have often been told my poetry is honest… I don’t know how poetry could not be honest really πŸ™‚ but it is always a great compliment to receive nonetheless, thankyou.

    yogash- not only did you read it once, you came back, and let me know. I appreciate that more than I can say πŸ™‚

    erinjeanine – always always glad to be of service πŸ™‚

    kcufniarb – Ah, but it doesn’t always fail. Just depends on how you look at things πŸ™‚

    much love to everyone!

  69. 79 fanan92 January 21, 2008 at 10:18 am

    WoW!!…that’s really amazing..i really liked it!..very enjoyable..(( what kind of pen do you use πŸ˜› lol….keep it up **Bec**


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