In a pulse
In the way
my heart quickens
in a pang,
in a desperate left-turn sidestep
whirling girligan
hula crazy
absence
what are you finding?
Behind your couch,
in candles blown out
I am finding pieces of you
wrapped up in old socks
held together
with mangy hair-ties,
in between a particle of dust
and a dead fly’s abandoned leg
you are there
or more, what you were
and what you passed to me –
with a sense of martyrdom & legacy
– is becoming slowly my self-awareness,
my left-turn right-march
falling on the floor
jump up dedication,
my strive
and drive
and yes,
In a pulse
In the way my heart quickens
I hear what you taught me
and can no longer uphold,
urging
me onwards
and up.
November ’07
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Very powerful. I can relate, and though that’s not the goal of all poetry, I can say this is very universal and appealing. Well done!
http://kevinolsenpoet.wordpress.com/poetry/
Thankyou very much 🙂
good post
good verses and apoet
Yes love can be found anywhere and everywhere. Good cadence.
you poems are good
I love it,very touching.Keep it up
thankyou all very much. I’m so glad that my poetry is being read and enjoyed.
amazing
hi i love u feac
Very nice!
Loving Awareness
Lady is a good poem.
Lady is a good poem.
angelerazo.elsalvador.com
that happens to be a very good poem. :]
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nice one….liked it….!!
n keep smiling 🙂
amazing 🙂
Very well done! Congratulations!
marianemanuel.com
I find the concluding segment unresolved and weaker in word choice than the earlier sections. It’s too good a piece to leave unfinished.
Amazing, reading this in early morning Amsterdam.
mandy
Amazing =]
This post has a reason
Unlike any of mine =]
Congrats
tank you very much
you know onething,for me when am overfilled with emotions…
words,my words which i pen down are da best outlook…
when i read your post…i found a glimpse of me….here in you
so good job done….
I like it. 🙂
very nice … !
very sweel i love it its a nice peom thingy you have there my email is anniesefart@wordpress.com
this touched me deeply.
thanx.!
nice…bring me to sea of dreams…
i like it….
nice!
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hhmm ….very good
Beautiful.
Thankyou everyone… I’m so glad my poetry is being enjoyed so much.
Especially big thanks to Eleanor Dickinson. Constructive critique comes few and far between and I really appreciate it. I also agree with you – the last stanza is weak. I’ll have another go at it sometime soon.
It’S a really good poem,but i think it was a little negative outlook on life.
Great imagery. I love the detail of the fly’s leg. beautiful.
nice
nice post. enjoyed reading it here in Manila, on a rainy Tuesday night.
very nice..
Super nice… I like it & I love it.
beautiful pizazz I really enjoyed reading it…
Thanks 🙂
And Dirus – everyone has positive and negative moments in life and you write how you feel at the time 🙂
This particular one is not negative. It is about negative things having positive results.
Your last comment really intrigues me. About how negative things have positive results. That’s exactly what I got out what you wrote and it really touched me because of the way that things are going in my personal life. Thank you for expressing what I cannot say.
sensational writing. i’m a pizazz convert.
thankyou both.
Seriously!
A very nice way of presentation
which is a new inspiration
for this young generation
to write, read and comprehension.
Though I am not a good poet but want to say ‘CONGRATULATION’.
‘MAY GOD BLESS YOU’ to write some valuable poems also…
Haha, thankyou!
November rian speaks loudly through dropping thoughts. Feelings freeze in the decemberance of rain. Frozen feelings melt amongst hope
so amazing and straight from the heart… you’re a great poet… yes you are.
-Jemm
http://thebluequill.wordpress.com
Love the imagery. . . 🙂
Wow! I loved it. Can I quote you? I don’t think the last stanza was weak at all. It’s perfect! Now come and see how it looks on my blog, fullness.wordpress.com. My life experience is right there with this poem it brought something pure forward. Thank you.
Thankyou so much to everyone for your kind comments. It’s very encouraging when other people enjoy my writing this much. Thankyou.
very strong feeling i like it very much i want some more about it
Verry lovely and cute ;]]
Whats p ;>>
First time read your poetry and impressed lot.
Thank you for sharing thought provoking intresting poetry.
x3140
very nice thinking, excellent. keep writing. i would like to see many like these
great
thanks everyone. more is coming.
delightfully charming
thankyou for such a bad poem! it touched me in the scencs of my bum tingling and wanting to crap all over the computer screen! IT WAS SO SHIT! thankyou!
Thankyou fivereflections. As for you Rose, criticism is much more useful when it is constructive. As it is, you just made yourself look unimaginative and dim-witted.
Wow!! I loved it. Great poem hon.
hi i loved your own poem n i like your eyes. 🙂
i’m new hear plz look my post also 😉
Sounds like Rose is wilted and dryed up from lack of love. The poem is original and sounds honest when read aloud.
it makes smile wherever i remember my girl lover
I have enjoyed seeing this poem transform into the maturity that you have found. Maybe I, myself have transformed since I first read it a month or so ago. Thank you for sharing!
nice…
great poem
Good Day. In A Pulse – you Know Who am Nazio, send yourself and wish you for you is all that you and neighbor, that the days is serene and that you can dedicate to what is you more to heart. In all omens with serenity and happiness. Good Christmas and Good Year, OMENS. Welcome Nazio in Italy
good poem and touching especially under this lines
In the way my heart quickens
I hear what you taught me
and can no longer uphold,
Beautiful. I love the fact that it can be related to real life.
Rock on girl!
wow. i love this!
I have found this randomley, but am so glad I did. A really terse and lean structure and some wonderful reflections on the big ‘l’ word, ta and keep writing! 🙂
thank you for this. i’ve been looking for something, anything to tell me it’s okay to still feel him around even though he’s gone, and there you were with you’re comforting words.
it’s beautiful.
very interesting.
i’m adding in RSS Reader
Love fails. End of story. God poem tho.
very nice 🙂
thanks for all the comments!
amber-I have often been told my poetry is honest… I don’t know how poetry could not be honest really 🙂 but it is always a great compliment to receive nonetheless, thankyou.
yogash- not only did you read it once, you came back, and let me know. I appreciate that more than I can say 🙂
erinjeanine – always always glad to be of service 🙂
kcufniarb – Ah, but it doesn’t always fail. Just depends on how you look at things 🙂
much love to everyone!
WoW!!…that’s really amazing..i really liked it!..very enjoyable..(( what kind of pen do you use 😛 lol….keep it up **Bec**
What do you mean ?
Thanks for sharing
very very very nice!